A ride to Wellington

What I can work on to improve my writing
Vocabulary	My goal is to use interesting words (adjectives ,verbs onomatopoeia, simile)
Ideas	Add more detail to my ideas (describe what I thought, did, heard saw) and make sure I finish my writing with my thoughts about the day
Punctuation	My goal is to be better at my full stops in the right place. Remember capital letter for place names.   And question marks

this is my holiday recount. I tried to proof. read my own writing

In the holidays  we were going to Wellington with my mum and my brother and I. were going  Wellington to visit my nan. It was boring in the car traveling all we got to do is  sit there and wait. A little while  we stopped for a brake. I had a big screech I couldn't wait till we get there. When we nearly got to Auckland I was getting hot. so I whined the window down. I felt tired I saw the  Sky tower there was a lot of traffic. I said to my mum are we nearly there she said you always say that  then I went on my phone to check the time.

But I forgot to put it on 12 hour clock so I went on the settings to do it.

Then I got tired and went to sleep. When I woke up I said to my mum how long did I sleep for she said like 10 minutes it felt long as. After  it was cold as ice.